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I am never happy with how my smut scans but I think yours was bang on. Smut is hard to write. Real sex involves a lot of repetive behavior.
"He thrust himself deep inside, again and again. And again, and again and again and again and then Vince got a cramp and moved his leg and then Howard thrust again and again and again.." I might edit this bit before putting it in a story. Mainly, I plan to make it longer and more repetitive.
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Date: 2012-03-28 02:43 am (UTC)I am never happy with how my smut scans but I think yours was bang on. Smut is hard to write. Real sex involves a lot of repetive behavior.
"He thrust himself deep inside, again and again. And again, and again and again and again and then Vince got a cramp and moved his leg and then Howard thrust again and again and again.." I might edit this bit before putting it in a story. Mainly, I plan to make it longer and more repetitive.